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Legal double post because I didn't know how to make a link that could seperate this from the fic! Here’s the prologue to my new one-chapter fanfic, The Friend. I won’t reveal what it’s about yet. This section contains a young Mufasa and Sarabi.

This is my first time writing fanfiction in what could only be years. I’d really appreciate any critiques you may have, although preferably if its to do with the actual writing and not the characterization--no one knows what a young Mufasa and Sarabi were like.

If you’d like to see more from this fanfic, let me know. Support usually makes for speedier writing!

I didn't spot any errors with this, and your use of the English language is very good; I'd even go as far as to call it book quality. It's a very well done story, and I'd like to see what happens next. I'm pretty sure I know who he's going to see, though.

Thank you so much for the compliment! I'm flattered by your kind words. I'm finalizing the script for the other chapter of this story. I'll hopefully be able to start it sometime soon.

And yes, I think one line in particular did give away some element of the surprise lol! It felt fitting, though.

This sounds like it's going to be a good one! Well written and the description is enough to keep you engaged, as is the dialogue

Thank you so much!

[quote="lelizwe"]Thank you so much for the compliment! I'm flattered by your kind words. I'm finalizing the script for the other chapter of this story. I'll hopefully be able to start it sometime soon.

And yes, I think one line in particular did give away some element of the surprise lol! It felt fitting, though.[/quote]

Well it's in the title. xP